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These vast expanses broader than the skies
And deeper than the ocean, just as blue
Are unobtainable from where the view
Is struck by light and hidden from my eyes.
Oh marvels of the farthest-reaching space,
Oh nebulae, oh planets, ancient stars,
Already naked eyes have fought such wars
To glimpse beyond the darkness to your face.
And light which grows with centuries has bled
Still higher in the night and drowned you out.
My city home has left my eyes in doubt
That worlds of breathless beauty I have read
Exist, nor are they found where'er I look:
All space confined in pages of a book.
A Bowlesian (Or Australian) sonnet for Crowns of Sonnets' February Sonnet Challenge: [link]

If I cannot see the stars and constellations in their bright glory, I wish I could at least see stars at all.

Title from a poem by Sarah Williams, though the quote is often wrongly attributed to Galileo: "Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;/I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
(Some copies have read, "I have loved the stars too truly," but I don't know which is correct.)
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Incredibly beautiful <3
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LaBruyere Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks. :)
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2014  Student Writer
This was quite beautiful. You had a rhyme scheme, but some rhymes were slanted and forced. (Stars and wars is a slant rhyme, and to me look and book were a little forced.) The poem in entirely however, was lovely and I hope to see more in the future. 
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LaBruyere Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you. :) The slanted rhyme was intentional and literary, but the forced rhyme was not. I feel like every poem lately has had at least one weak rhyme despite revision. But it's people like you who remind me to keep trying, rather than settle. I'll see what I can do. Especially since that's my closing couplet. Thanks for reading!
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Student Writer
No problem! I am so glad there are people like you in the deviantart community that keep writing and editing through their work. :)
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ololosha-ololoeva Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014
omg it is so beautiful *-*
author, it's absolutely amazing!
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Student Writer
Well thank you! For commenting and watching!
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! I've used the title of this piece in a poem for of my Found Poetry Project :heart:
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LaBruyere Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Student Writer
Sweetness!
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
These vast expanses broader than the skies
And deeper than the ocean, just as blue"


That opening is simply amazing, so beautifully written. I honestly cannot find things to fault, it is breathtaking and the words you have used are mouthwatering :heart:
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