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These vast expanses broader than the skies
And deeper than the ocean, just as blue
Are unobtainable from where the view
Is struck by light and hidden from my eyes.
Oh marvels of the farthest-reaching space,
Oh nebulae, oh planets, ancient stars,
Already naked eyes have fought such wars
To glimpse beyond the darkness to your face.
And light which grows with centuries has bled
Still higher in the night and drowned you out.
My city home has left my eyes in doubt
That worlds of breathless beauty I have read
Exist, nor are they found where'er I look:
All space confined in pages of a book.
A Bowlesian (Or Australian) sonnet for Crowns of Sonnets' February Sonnet Challenge: [link]

If I cannot see the stars and constellations in their bright glory, I wish I could at least see stars at all.

Title from a poem by Sarah Williams, though the quote is often wrongly attributed to Galileo: "Though my soul may set in darkness, it will rise in perfect light;/I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night."
(Some copies have read, "I have loved the stars too truly," but I don't know which is correct.)
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:icondailybreadcafe:
DailyBreadCafe Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2015   Writer
There is some really beautiful imagery in this, and I love the sense of longing in it, for the lost beauty of a night sky.
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
We try so hard to steer from astrology. ;)
Nice work. :)
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2015  Student Writer
Ha! Thanks. :) I don't believe a lick of astrology, but how can I not long for the stars' beauty? ;)
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't either...  but why people cross people is never by mistake. ^^
Agreed? ^^

I found a rather strange user just awhile ago...
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2015  Student Writer
Yeah, I agree. Though I would say it has more to do with God than stars. ^^
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Exactly. :)
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Incredibly beautiful <3
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks. :)
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2014  Student Writer
This was quite beautiful. You had a rhyme scheme, but some rhymes were slanted and forced. (Stars and wars is a slant rhyme, and to me look and book were a little forced.) The poem in entirely however, was lovely and I hope to see more in the future. 
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you. :) The slanted rhyme was intentional and literary, but the forced rhyme was not. I feel like every poem lately has had at least one weak rhyme despite revision. But it's people like you who remind me to keep trying, rather than settle. I'll see what I can do. Especially since that's my closing couplet. Thanks for reading!
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Student Writer
No problem! I am so glad there are people like you in the deviantart community that keep writing and editing through their work. :)
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ololosha-ololoeva Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014
omg it is so beautiful *-*
author, it's absolutely amazing!
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  Student Writer
Well thank you! For commenting and watching!
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! I've used the title of this piece in a poem for of my Found Poetry Project :heart:
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Student Writer
Sweetness!
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
These vast expanses broader than the skies
And deeper than the ocean, just as blue"


That opening is simply amazing, so beautifully written. I honestly cannot find things to fault, it is breathtaking and the words you have used are mouthwatering :heart:
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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jagrier Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Professional Writer
Featured in a post entitled "Poetry + Art: Speculative." [link]
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Student Writer
Cool! Thanks!
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aldwarke Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013
I knew this was going to be good even from the title. Lovely scansion and metre. It deserves (and will get from me) further study. I can tell it will reveal more.
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LaBruyere Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very much for reading and commenting!
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KreepingSpawn Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Complex and fascinating as the subject it addresses. ;)
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! Wow, it was my intention. Glad it worked! :)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
Hello! :wave:

I have used the wonderful title of your piece in poem for The Title Poem project!

[link]
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
Cool project! Glad it worked well for you. :)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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JessiRenee Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Professional General Artist
*gasp* these are such beautiful words.... it takes my breath away!
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Student Writer
Well, thanks! :)
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
always good
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Echo-of-Echo Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013
This is gorgeous. It's filled with beauty, and a certain hopelessness, which offset any tackiness or morbidness the piece might have had. And it winds up perfect.
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks! I appreciate the read and the feedback. :)
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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:iconlabruyere:
LaBruyere Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Student Writer
:D
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